This morning, Miss Snark read my aforementioned story idea (known on her blog as Crapometer Entry #300) and I got high marks! Yay! So far, web site commenters generally liked the premise as well (except for a few Anonymouses, etc) so I have to say I’m pleased with the success of my hook. Now to send off the first 3 pages!
Title: Taylor and the Tooth Fairy
Genre: Paranormal Romance
Taylor Masterson, a no-nonsense archeologist, can’t wait for his latest discovery to earn much-needed funds for his overworked crew, but before he has the partial skeleton in his possession for 24 hours, a blonde bimbo with glitter wings–some sort of inept spy from his competition?–sneaks into his tent at midnight, claims she’s some sort of magical being (as if!) and tries to fly off with his discovery.
Daisy le Fey, an apprentice tooth fairy, yearns to wow her superiors so that she can escape the drudgery at the Pixie Dust Factory, but her very first solo assignment turns into an unmitigated disaster when the supposedly sleeping child turns out to be a sexy (half-naked!) man who refuses to hand over the tooth.
Desperate to avoid ruining her would-be career on her first night out, Daisy has no choice but to break regulation and stay to fight for possession of the tooth. And if she uses her fledgling magical powers for unsanctioned purposes, what’s a mishap here and there? So what if her wand misses Taylor’s tent and turns his assistant into a pumpkin. It could happen to anyone.
Determined to unmask the beautiful liar, Taylor focuses his masculine wiles on keeping the kooky charmer in his bed and out of his archeological dig. Just because chaos erupts every time Daisy bats her lashes sure doesn’t mean she’s telling the truth. After all, there’s no such thing as magic… right?
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Thanks to the inimitable Miss Snark‘s Crapometer, I did squeeze some writing in yesterday! Just under 250 words of text, mind you, but new writing nonetheless.
What’s a Crapometer*? This is when an anonymous literary agent such as Miss Snark kindly invites writers to submit their hooks, queries, first pages, etc for her professional review. (Her legion of comment posters also bestow their pithy responses.)
I chose to do this for three reasons, enumerated here: (you know I love lists!)
1. I have a fledgling idea that I’d like to throw out there before writing 400 useless pages. (Yes, in the past I did write a 400 page monstrosity that failed because of the underlying plot, not because of the writing itself.)
2. I am toying with rewriting a previous story, and am curious to know whether or not impartial minds think I should bother. (No, not the plotless horror alluded to in #1. A story that finalled in a respected competition.)
3. Although I kicked myself for missing the first few Crapometers, I laughed and cried vicariously through the web site posts and determined to not let the chance slip by me again.
Since I want to get honest opinions from the crowd, I’m not going to mention which number/post I am on her site until after Miss Snark (and her snarklings) have had a chance to pass their judgments upon my 250 word hooks.
I’ll keep you posted!
ERiCA
* Also known as a “Crapstravaganza”
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I’m back from my trip (and it was fantastic!) and moved into my new house (with my very own office–yay!) but not yet unpacked. I’m still buried under mounds of cardboard boxes, and until I can unearth all my writerly things (OK, and my socks, etc) my posts will be sporadic at best. It is my personal goal to be back on track *before* the new year, so please–wish me luck!
Thanks,
ERiCA
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